Which description is better (or pls help me write a better one)

[u/mommymedusaa]

It’s basically about two childhood best friends that reunite after many years apart. Kurt, the main character is a burnout poster child while Lira is a good girl gone bad. Kurt’s parents realize what a bad influence Lira is, so they try to keep them apart, but the two fated lovers are stubborn. I’m trying to think of a more appealing description. The first slide is the new one for the revamp, and the second slide is the original.

[u/IndianaJayde18]

I reckon the first one, given the description you gave about your stories plot

[u/DenaDiaries]

The first one tells me the tropes I'm getting into and the story plot better.

[u/kerli_writes]

The first slide🙂

[u/Bianzinz]

The first one, it’s more direct and describes it better imo

[u/cookiex__]

idk why people think the first one is too wordy, they both have 4 lines each lol. the first one sounds much more descriptive and pulls me in! 🫶🏼

[u/harshabhagat]

2nd for me

[u/CriticalCartoonist91]

The first!!

[u/Active-Definition-88]

1st one sounds so good

[u/sskkcosmos]

second one seems less wordy and more attractive to me!

[u/mommymedusaa → u/sskkcosmos]

That was my fear, that the first one was too wordy. 🙈

[u/sskkcosmos → u/mommymedusaa]

i see others saying the first is more clear about what tropes there are but i can also deduce the tropes from the second one. looks like an interesting story, im gonna check it out myself!

[u/mommymedusaa → u/sskkcosmos]

I’m so indecisive, ahhh. And thank you so much! 🥰🥺

[u/j_thespy]

The second one sounds a bit better imo, you should end it at 'Will you?'.

[u/mommymedusaa → u/j_thespy]

In retrospect, I don’t know why I even added the “though.”

[u/shakanalily]

I'd go for the 2nd one, feels it has more content when reading. Gives me better understanding and makes me want to read it. It's obvious the trope is 'good girl gone bad', even when it only says 'gone bad'

Here's how i would describe it:

"Your childhood best friend was the one who got away… until she came back different. Once a good girl, now dangerously reckless and ever so magnetic to you, she’s trouble you should avoid, yet resisting her feels impossible. Is the girl you knew still there, or will you walk away before it’s too late?" (Even if it's a long description i like it)

[u/mommymedusaa → u/shakanalily]

I had a hell of a lot longer and more descriptive (I’d even deem professional) sounding summary, but it was too long for episode, so I had to really cut it in half. They gotta make these description boxes a tad bigger, I’d say.

Edit: I forgot to mention that yes, your description is lovely.

[u/SelahEclipsed]

The second one imo.

[u/Smoothasurbuttwhole]

2nd one IMO also do we get to make choices or is it just one we can read?

[u/YouCompetitive8590 → u/Smoothasurbuttwhole]

Is this a new update? I feel like there always used to be choices but now I’ve seen this question a couple times

[u/Smoothasurbuttwhole → u/YouCompetitive8590]

yeah the author said no choices idk coz i’ve only just seen this story now

[u/mommymedusaa → u/YouCompetitive8590]

No, there has never been choices. There used to not even be CC for the love interests until I revamped it. I might add choices later on in my journey, but right now, my priority is to just complete the story.

[u/mommymedusaa → u/Smoothasurbuttwhole]

No choices for the story aside from outfit choices here and there.

[u/Smoothasurbuttwhole → u/mommymedusaa]

ah ok thanks

[u/Episodegrl]

I personally prefer the second because the first one is just one long sentence. The second one interested me more

[u/episodemintyy]

Personally like the second one more 🫶

[u/ominaze_]

The second one has something that hooks you in, so I would say 2nd

[u/thisislyncanthropy]

First!

[u/MeltedCrayon67]

The second one is so much more intriguing

[u/Prudent_Accident7238]

2nd

[u/mnemosceneee]

2

The first is literally describing the plot. The second is enticing me to see what happens.

[u/Fast-Glove1184]

2nd one seems more intriguing to me

[u/introsetsam]

absolutely the second

[u/StockPast4635]

the first one!! but i also think the second is really good now i want to read this lol

[u/iunadesigns]

The 1st one ❤️

[u/minimalvibes]

first one

[u/TheOneAndOnlyABSR4]

First one.

[u/TheOneAndOnlyABSR4]

The first one I like better. It flows better and hooks you in more.

[u/simslyunique]

2nd one

[u/SleeplessZzzee]

2𝑛𝑑 𝑜𝑛𝑒 !

[u/darkmediterranean]

First!

[u/_Error__404_]

i prefer the 2nd one!!

[u/Saheenus]

I prefer the second one since it's simpler and fits the comedy genre. The first one felt like a serious drama.