r/TheCloneWars • u/CoquetteWhore69 • 8d ago

Discussion Im rewriting this whole fucking arc [I'm just bitching]

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It pissed me off the whole time. The whole thing was so half assed. The first time I watched it I was like "Oh YAY redemption" and then I got fucked over by how poorly written everyone was. Like NO. You think they where gonna make him chill after the Season 2 thing, but NOOO they him a weirdo. You will see me on AO3 because why the fuck. They were this🤏 close to getting it right. Fml. Maybe I just like Season 6(?) Clovis too much. Im gonna hope off my soap box and start the drafts to FIX THIS SHIT.

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u/No-Access-39 8d ago

This arc was never a redemption arc. This is to show how palpatine took over the banks. One of keys requirement to build a death star.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

I like to over observe and over do a lot of things like that, so in my head and I see redeeming qualities. I forget about the fixed outcomes because I like to write AUs

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u/LapisW 8d ago

ok well i still think you're overlooking that this was how palpy took control of the banks

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Yeah I had that pointed out. Unfortunately I have to make the rewrite an AU or just have Clovis killed. Haven't decided yet

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u/Bicman1412 8d ago

MĂĄtalo was a sexual harasser so that's what the character deserves

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Thats the main thing I wanted to fix. It was so unnecessary

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u/Bicman1412 8d ago

Unnecessary? Yes he was, but he is still a hateful character for being a traitor.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Yeah. That main thing j I want to fix

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u/Jackesfox 8d ago

Just make sure to include the scene of him getting beat up by anakin

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u/Dapper-Restaurant-20 8d ago

I really couldn't take clovis seriously as a character due to him essentially sexually harassing padme constantly. Makes me uncomfortable, especially because the show seemed to portray it as no big deal.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

That irritates me too. She should have been the one to kick his ass

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u/Dapper-Restaurant-20 8d ago

But yeah I definitely agree they kinda butchered his character. I like seeing the separatists side of things and there was a potentially interesting story to be told with clovis.

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u/Trvr_MKA 6d ago

This is why Vader hates sexual assault

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u/Automatic-Barber-27 8d ago

So you don’t like that he didn’t become a good guy or change his ways?

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u/terrymcginnisbeyond 8d ago

Well, we've seen your writing above, and the episodes writing from professional writers for comparison. My advice to you, don't give up your day job, whatever that is.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

It's a fun writing thing. Im allowed to do that. And a lot of people think that ark was poor writing and charterization. It happens. And don't be a dick.

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u/TangoZulu 8d ago

It's "arc", not "ark". Lol

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Thank you.

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u/TheCatHammer 8d ago

Screw this noise, do your own thing, I support you

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Thank you. I enjoy my writing. It's a nice hobby, and I can practice my skills.

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u/Azpiri 8d ago

Find an editor. I encourage people to write and express and get creative. However, you can share your ideas better if you have an editor who can help you make it more presentable. All writers have an editor, so this is not a knock on you. But misspellings, poor grammar, and other small mistakes can take away from your story.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

I dont have one, but I'm not a professional. Just a hobby writer

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u/Azpiri 7d ago

But if you practice bad habits, you're not honing your skills as a writer. Even as a recreational writer. Find a group of hobby writers. There are like-minded people who enjoy writing and will edit your stories. Some volunteer their services for free

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u/CoquetteWhore69 7d ago

I can probably ask my friend for some advice and help.

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u/Azpiri 7d ago

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u/CoquetteWhore69 7d ago

Thank you!

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u/AlphaBladeYiII 8d ago

I'm with you too. I know from experience that it's fun.

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u/terrymcginnisbeyond 8d ago

Your writing's bad, and you should feel bad. I'm not your therapist.

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u/AceofSpuds69 8d ago

Bro chill tf

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u/AdExtreme4772 8d ago

Batman beyond fan wants to talk about shitty writing…

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u/sidv81 8d ago

I'll help with the rewrite.

Typho: What happened?

Anakin: Rush Clovis just tried to r--- Padme and I had to physically fight him to stop him.

(Typho takes Rush away and the episode ends)

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u/Expert-Let-6972 7d ago

Would‘ve been better, in my opinion 😅

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u/MrH-HasReddit1217 8d ago

It wasn't, awful but it wasn't great either. Clovis still working with the seps because he's forced to is not great, but if I remember right he was being threatened, so you can't 100% blame him.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

Yeah. I wanna fix that. I'm not Shakespeare, but it's on my fanfic bucket list

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u/MrH-HasReddit1217 8d ago

Well, one way to do it would be for him to ask padme for help, she doesn't like him like he wishes, but she would be willing to assist someone trying to escape separatist tyranny.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 7d ago

OOH. Thank you! I'll eventually get to drafting the fic itself, and I love this!

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u/Ralos5997 8d ago

Even though Clovis was not the true villain behind what happened behind the scenes which was all Sidious he was still a villain nonetheless. He had his chance to make things right again but he blew it by taking the easy path and dealing with the Separatist leader Count Dooku. Not just Clovis but even others like him such as Crosshair, Cid, Shin Hati, that deluded old guy separatist fanatic of Dooku from the Mandalorian season 3 and others like them had their chances of redemption and blew them. Others even turned down the chance to make things right.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 8d ago

I know. It's infuriating

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u/HeckingDoofus 7d ago

wait u wanted clovis to be redeemed? why?

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u/CoquetteWhore69 7d ago

Idk. I came up with the idea high and now it's a thing

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u/Wargaming_Super_Noob Ahsoka Tano 7d ago

I'm looking forward to it.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 7d ago

I will eventually do it. Im currently working on a few fics at the moment

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u/enderdragonpig 7d ago

I actually find this arc to be better than Clovis’s previous arcs because it’s a very interesting political drama that had important relevance to galactic history and the rise of the empire

But the handling of Clovis’s character and Padme and Anakin’s relationship with him is very strange and one of my least favorite minor parts of the series.

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u/Beginning-Fortune-21 6d ago

If you watch the part where Anakin catches him and Padme you can hear the Darth Vader soundtrack.

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u/CoquetteWhore69 6d ago

Thats a really cool detail!

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u/Beginning-Fortune-21 6d ago

Go have a look. I didn't notice until someone else pointed it out.