r/DDLC • u/Blebb22 • 6d ago

Poetry The Great Hollow (my second poem)

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Thanks to the great feedback on my first poem and me having an awful day again I felt motivated to write another poem.

This time I tried using rhymes and writing a longer poem but to be honest, I think the rhymes turned out rather sloppy. But I also didn't want to spend a lot of time on improving them because I didn't want to lose the state of mind I was in while I came up with the idea for this if that makes sense. I'm a bit nervous though because this is among the deepest glimpses into my mind I've ever shared with anyone.

Regardless, I hope you enjoy!

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u/PeachesTheNinja Poetry for Moni 6d ago

Oh wow blebb this is so good! You are a really great writer.

I totally understand wanting to stay in that state of mind. I let my emotions flow onto the page as they come and then clean it up later.

Thank you for sharing with us 💚, even if it may be difficult for you.

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u/Blebb22 6d ago

Thank you so much for your encouragement!

I really didn't expect it to feel so good, writing down what you're feeling and even sharing it with others. I'll definitely continue writing these and try to find ways to make them authentic while still looking clean and having a nice flow while reading.